Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Midshipman/Archive 1

Midshipman edit

I'm adding this article to be peer reviewed because I've attempted to address the concerns to elevate this to B-Class but I'm unclear what else to change/add. There are inline citations and I need more guidance on omissions, if there are any please document them and I can add them to the article. Thanks. Kirk (talk) 22:09, 17 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Perseus71 edit

Here are my two cents on the topic. I am not a expert on the topic so may not be able to provide much comments on the omissions. I can help to make it B-Class worthy.

  1. The lead is too short. Please refer to WP:LEAD for an idea.
  2. The images need to be listed on the right according to WP:IMAGE.
  3. Both US officer ranks and US_armed_forces_insignia_navigation need to be at the bottom of the article after References. As it stands they are in the Section above References. Same with Commissioned Officer ranks.
  4. Its a good Idea to list the references in accordance with one of the two citation Styles See WP:CITE. For examples, see B-52 Stratofortress. Please also apply Cite:WEB.
  5. There are citations in the middle of a Paragraph. Best to put them at the end of the same.
  6. When covering multiple countries and their variations, its best to start the section with Country name. See BF 109 Operational History
  7. Since this is English language encyclopedia, its best to put non-english word in Italics inside parenthesis with English translation before the parenthesis. Ex. aspirant (garde marine). I don't like this convention myself. But that's another matter.
  8. Seven references seem a short number. Could you at least try and get the maximum out of those ?

More Comments after a through read. Perseus71 (talk) 21:37, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]