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Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Blair Anderson Wark

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Blair Anderson Wark edit

Prior peer review located here.

I am requesting a peer review for this article with the aim of fixing up any problems and possibly improving it further before/if I take it to FAC. The article is rated A-Class with this project, but I have been reluctant to take it through FAC as it is relatively short, although is quite comprehensive. My decision has been swayed somewhat on viewing the article Issy Smith; a Featured Article also on a Victoria Cross recipient which is slightly shorter then Wark's. EyeSerene has also given the article a light copyedit. Any and all comments welcome. Thanks, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 10:35, 7 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Skinny87 edit

  • I'd say that the second paragraph of the lead needs to be extended a bit. I'll add some more comments when I can. Skinny87 (talk) 20:56, 8 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Thanks for commenting. I'm not sure how I can expand the lead, particularly the second paragraph, as it does summarise every major facet of Wark's life. The only thing I thought I could include in the lead that isn't there already is the fact that he established his own business; which I have now done so. Also, for an article of this size I think the two paragraphs there suit well, however I am open to any suggestions. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 23:12, 8 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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