Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of Cartagena de Indias

Battle of Cartagena de Indias

Coordinator note, this review was initiated by Tttom (talk · contribs) at 22:50 UTC on 16 August 2010. -MBK₀₀₄ 00:33, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

AustralianRupert

• in the References, Citation # 41 has a bare url which should be formatted so that the chain is not visiable (you've done this with the others);
• in the Bibliography section, the works without ISBNs should have OCLC numbers. These can be found at [1];
  • I haven't seen these used in articles on WP. Browsing the last few FAs today, not one show an OCLC number.
• in the Bibliography section, the link to "Tobias Smollett" shouldn't be in brackets, it should just be piped as you've done with Fernandez;
  • Done.
• according to the Featured article tools one of your external links is broken: [2];
  • Done.
• Alt text could be added to the images per WP:ALT;
  • not sure what is needed exactly but added some additional text. Tried following the usage in WP:ALT but caption just disappeared. Tttom1 (talk) 04:54, 25 September 2010 (UTC)
• the Advisor script reports that the ISBN for "Harbon, John D..Trafalgar and the Spanish navy, Conway Maritime Press, 2004, ISBN 08700216953, pp.108 - 113." in Citation # 49 might not be correct, can you please investigate? AustralianRupert (talk) 04:01, 25 August 2010 (UTC)
  • Done.

XavierGreen

• I'm not sure how detailed the information that exists on the subject is, but articles on large battles such quite often have an order of battle section.XavierGreen (talk) 06:11, 25 August 2010 (UTC)
  • As the composition of forces changes over the course of the action, those forces particular to that part are given in the section related.Tttom1 (talk) 15:28, 25 September 2010 (UTC)

Woody

It is looking good, much better than the previous incarnations of the article.

• The lead is too small for the size of the article. I would suggest a couple of good-sized paragraphs.
• "Blas de Lezo, a Basque, was an experienced, wily and tenacious Spanish Naval commander, whose previous career was as daring and spectacular as any naval officer of his day." This is all a bit POV and unsupported by sources. Any source for this, is it a quote
  • • Sources given at end of paragraph: Rodgers and Harbon.
• Which language version are we going for? Manoeuvre would seem correct to me? Same with harbor-->harbour etc
  • I use American English spelling, I believe either is correct, but use should be one or the other. In this case, as the primary editor, it should follow American spelling - I suppose.Tttom1 (talk) 05:10, 25 September 2010 (UTC)
• "The expedition was very slow getting started from England. Initially, contrary winds delayed the sailing until most of the shipboard provisions were consumed and a steep increase of sickness[50] occurred among the ship crews, then news of the sailing of the French squadrons and a Spanish squadron caused further delay while the British fleet was reinforced in response." This is too long, can we split it in two?
  • Done.
• It might benefit from a slight copyedit, quite a few sentences don't seem to run well to me.
• Overall though, this is a good article that deals with the issues neutrally. Good work, Woody (talk) 11:34, 25 August 2010 (UTC)

Any reason why there's a picture of Philip V from 1700 in this article? Herodotus1960 (talk) 14:32, 25 September 2010 (UTC)

• • Good question, the correct King reigns, twice - switching to another image. Done.Tttom1 (talk) 15:28, 25 September 2010 (UTC)