Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/4477th Test and Evaluation Squadron

4477th Test and Evaluation Squadron

Another B that I hopefully can get to GA. I want some suggestions before I try for GAN, though. WikiCopter^Radio_Checklist^{Formerly AirplanePro} 18:58, 26 August 2010 (UTC)

AustralianRupert

Good work so far. I'm afraid I can't really comment on the content specifically, but I have a few other observations that you might consider:

• you appear to have used the same image twice in the article (the two F5s with a MiG 17 and MiG 21). Is this a mistake or did you intend to do this?

done

• some paragraphs need citations: e.g. the last paragraph in Origins section and the last paragraph in HAVE MiGs;

done

• I think that the Aircraft list should sit outside the History section;

done

• the citations should be outside punctuation per WP:PAIC, however, there are a few in the lead that need to be tweaked;

done

• It is probably best not to use contractions such as "wasn't" as this is too informal for an encyclopedia, thus it is better to use "was not" instead;

can you list an example? I cannot find one

In the Origins section, this clause here: "...veteran F-4 pilot Gail Peck, who wasn't satisfied with..." (my emphasis). AustralianRupert (talk) 22:35, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

• the year range in the infobox should have an endash per WP:DASH instead of a hyphen.

done

• did the information from the Reference come from multiple pages, or just one page? If it is multiple pages you need to have different citations that make this clear. Currently you appear to either be saying that all the information came from Davies page 352 or the entire book. For an example of this, please take a look at Battle of Berlin;

will fix as soon as I recieve the book from the library

• the links to HAVE DRILL and HAVE DOUGHNUT are circular links back to this article, is that necessary?

done WikiCopter^Radio_Checklist^{Formerly AirplanePro} 22:06, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

• there is inconsistent date formatting in the article. In the infobox you have "March 4, 1988", but in the Accidents section you have "23 August 1979". These should be consistent;

done WikiCopter^Radio_Checklist^{Formerly AirplanePro} 22:06, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

• Red Eagle is a disambig link that should be fixed: [1];

it's a hatnote, should be a dablink WikiCopter^Radio_Checklist^{Formerly AirplanePro} 22:06, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

Fair call. I really should start checking the tools better. Apologies. AustralianRupert (talk) 22:35, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

• be careful of overlinking terms, for example you have linked Air Force Systems Command twice in consequective sentences in the HAVE MiGs section, also MiG 17 is linked twice in the Aircraft subsection (the general rule at GA and above is usually link once in the lead, in the infobox and upon first mention in the prose, but no more than that);

done. At least this won't get tagged with {{wikify}} soon! WikiCopter^Radio_Checklist^{Formerly AirplanePro} 22:06, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

• the prose is a bit indistinct about when the squadron commenced operations. The infobox lists the date as May 1, 1980, but in the Accidents section you list an accident that occured in 1979. I think this might be cleared up if you added a distinct "Operations" section after "Origins", and say quite clearly when the squadron came into being;

done WikiCopter^Radio_Checklist^{Formerly AirplanePro} 22:06, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

• are there any other sources that you could consult? Currently you really only use one, but I think at successful GAN would require a few more than that. AustralianRupert (talk) 01:49, 27 August 2010 (UTC)

no WikiCopter^Radio_Checklist^{Formerly AirplanePro} 22:06, 27 August 2010 (UTC)