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1868 Expedition to Abyssinia

I've made numerous substantial additions to this article over the last month -- incluing adding some images (which historically have been my weak point), & would like some suggestions on what more I could do to further improve this article. (Yes, I know it needs a map -- what else? ;-) -- llywrch 03:09, 9 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin

Quite good, overall; a few suggestions:

The lead should be lengthened considerably; as it is, it doesn't really summarize the article.
{{Infobox Military Conflict}} ought to work here.
This may just be personal preference, but I dislike article titles that begin with dates; perhaps something like Abyssinian expedition of 1868 might be neater?
The "See also" section should be eliminated; the lone link there can easily be mentioned in the text when the treasure itself is being discussed.
And, yes, a map would really help. ;-)

Kirill 17:25, 10 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]