Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/No. 79 Squadron RAAF
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Promoted EyeSerenetalk 09:41, 9 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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This article on a Royal Australian Air Force squadron with a fairly convoluted history was assessed as being a GA in January. Since then I have further expanded it, and think that it may now meet the A class criteria. Please note that there isn't any dedicated book on the history of this unit (other than a self-published account of its World War II service), so the article is sourced from a number of references - despite this, I think that the account here is comprehensive. Nick-D (talk) 01:41, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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- Explain or link Permanent Air Force and Air Force Reserve for readers unfamiliar with the RAAF.
- Done
- Did the strength of the squadron in Thailand ever exceed 8?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:05, 26 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Technical review
- No dab links.
- External link to NAA gives a warning but works fine from article.
- Fixed a couple of alt text issues -- no further action req'd. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:21, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Support
Comments:Not much as it looks quite good to me:- the images appear appropriately licenced (no action required);
- in the World War II section, "reequipped". Should this be "re-equipped"? The Macquarie Dictionary I have on my desk supports the latter;
- in the Cold War section, "reestablished". Should this be "re-established"? The Macquarie Dictionary supports the latter;
- in the Cold War section, "reequipped". Should this be "re-equipped"? As above;
- in the Current status section, "reestablished". As above. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:49, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Support -- Nice work as usual, Nick; made my usual minor copyedit but generally prose, structure, detail, images, and referencing look sound; couple of minor things:
- The squadron has been formed on four occasions since it was first established in 1943... --"First established" (or "first formed") always sounds a tautology to me (like "new initiative"). How about The squadron has been reformed on three occasions since it was established in 1943...?
- I think it needs to be clearer that the 8 Sabres from 77SQN were used for the reformed 79SQN at Ubon (via Singapore); at the moment the uninitiated can assume a connection but it's not explicit. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 10:52, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Support. - Dank (push to talk) 15:38, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- There was very little to fix. A few judgment calls I didn't make: - Dank (push to talk)
- "initial jet aircraft training to new RAAF pilots": I think I'd prefer the word you use in the last section, "introductory", to "initial", because "initial" can be misinterpreted as redundant to "jet aircraft training to new RAAF pilots".
- Done
- "as a result of wounds": That's not wrong, but I recommend "from wounds", and there's a little more to this than simply reducing 4 words to 1; there's something of a trend in formal English to replace some phrases that are synonyms of "because" with prepositions.
- Done (the few words per sentence the better in my view!).
- "In exchange" usually feels wry and metaphorical to me when used to describe trading casualties; it's not wrong, but it's just a little more "clever" than the context supports, I think.
- Fair enough; I've replaced this with a 'however'
- "later further improved": I think I prefer "later improved".
- I think that the current wording is OK - the issue is that living conditions were improved from a low standard and then later made even better.
- "The squadron was equipped with 12 Mirage III fighters that had previously been operated by No. 3 Squadron, and a single DHC-4 Caribou transport." There are exceptions, but see WP:MHCL#series; more often than not, a sentence is a little easier to read if you put the complex element in the series last: *"The squadron was equipped with a single DHC-4 Caribou transport and 12 Mirage III fighters that had previously been operated by No. 3 Squadron."
- Given that the squadron was formed to operate the Mirages and the Caribou was assigned to it for administrative-type reasons, it seems best to lead with the Mirages.
- "South East Asia": I'm not sure; check the hyphenation on this. (It's "Southeast Asia" in AmEng.) - Dank (push to talk) 15:38, 27 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed to Southeast Asia (which is what the Australian official history uses, so is presumably common usage here as well). Thanks a lot for the comments. Nick-D (talk) 09:44, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Sure thing. - Dank (push to talk) 13:18, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed to Southeast Asia (which is what the Australian official history uses, so is presumably common usage here as well). Thanks a lot for the comments. Nick-D (talk) 09:44, 28 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Support. I have a small problem with The squadron was reformed... due to the ambiguity of "reform" which might mean "form again", or perhaps "remake in a more suitable form, to remedy previous defects". Rumiton (talk) 16:12, 2 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Good call; someone might want to check Macquarie's for "re-formed", but rewording would be safe. - Dank (push to talk) 19:15, 2 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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