Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Kaunas Fortress
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Kaunas Fortress edit
Promoted --ROGER DAVIES talk 10:41, 24 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Prior nomination here
After first nomination failure article undergone further improvements: was added several new sections, older ones there expanded per request on previuos reviewer; there were introduced additional new references and carried out other improvements. Hope this article meats A req. now M.K. (talk) 12:11, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Support A well-written and informative article. A few comments, however.
- "After the battle, the fortress' military importance declined as advances in weaponry rendered it increasingly obsolete and it was used for civilian enterprises and as a garrison." -> I think this needs to be referenced. I might not have read the article well enough, but I don't believe I see this repeated in the text and referenced, and so it probably needs one in the lead. Although it might seem obvious (that fortresses became obsolete after the First World War), statements like this need to be referenced.
- Exemplified by the edit link for the post-war section, the two pictures cause bunching. This is easy to fix (it happens a lot when multiple templates are put one after the other).
- However, the article meets A-class standards without question. JonCatalán (talk) 18:21, 16 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. Good job. One question, though. What does, "these were fortified positions of various artillery types and were located on the line of the fort cycle" mean? Cla68 (talk) 01:00, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. Looks good, and I wasn't able to find any problems besides those mentioned above. Borg Sphere (talk) 23:19, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose Criterion A4 Prose/MoS
- Although this article has come a very long way since its last nomination - for which, congratulations! - the prose isn't quite to the standard of the rest. It needs a quick tidy up by an uninvolved copy-editor. Examples:
- After the World War I ... > "After the First World War" or "After World War I"?
- Complex of the constructions of Kaunas Fortress is the only remaining fortress of the Russian Empire in its entirety. > What does this mean? Could it be clearer?
- Due to its strategic location near the confluence of two rivers, Nemunas and Neris, ancient trade routes which link Vilnius to the Baltic Sea, the city of Kaunas has long been a key geopolitical feature of the region. > Could this be more concise?
- The first general plan of the fortress was made by Generals... > "The fortress was originally mapped out by Generals"?
- cork in attempt to minimize firing noise > "an attempt to reduce"
- --ROGER DAVIES talk 17:04, 20 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- It's fine. --ROGER DAVIES talk 10:41, 24 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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