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HMS Marlborough (1912)

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HMS Marlborough (1912) (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

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A bit of a departure for me, this was the second command flagship of the Grand Fleet for much of the war. She had quite an eventful career, being in the thick of the fighting at Jutland, where she was badly damaged by a German torpedo. After the Great War she was involved in the British intervention in the Black Sea during the Russian Civil War and ultimately served as a target for weapons tests. Thanks to all who take the time to review the article. Parsecboy (talk) 19:06, 13 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 02:33, 17 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments

  • No DABs, external links OK.
  • Images appropriately licensed.
  • Some redundancies in the displacement section in the infobox.
    • Not sure what you're talking about.
  • Change HMNB Devonport in the lede to Devonport Royal Dockyard. More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:53, 23 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • Good catch
  • I wouldn't advise abbreviating yards. Yd looks very odd as you very rarely see it ever abbreviated.
    • Done
  • group of battleships battering of the German light cruiser fix this.
    • Done
  • German cruiser launched probably two torpedoes awkward.
  • knocking the shores loose Is that what they're actually called? I've always heard of them as props.
    • Could be a BrEng vs. AmEng thing - Campbell calls them shores (and that's where the article here is, incidentally).
  • Might consider consolidating these into a single sentence: She was repaired by the Armstrong Whitworth shipyard at Jarrow. The work lasted until 2 August, and she thereafter departed for Cromarty, arriving on 5 August.
    • Merged.
  • Second command reads oddly to me, even though I think that it's proper RN terminology. Perhaps assistant or deputy commander?
  • I think that you mean that the ship was re-commissioned in 1919.
    • Fixed
  • Link to 4th Battle Squadron and kite balloon.
    • Added both.
  • Add the ampersand command to the entry for Perry and Pleshakov.
    • Done
  • Standardize publisher location data for state/country.
    • Fixed
  • Stationery office.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:09, 24 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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  • According to The Times Marlborough commissioned at Devonport on 2 June, 1914, and according to the Navy List completed to full crew on 16 June.
    • Do you have the full citation for the Times? I don't have a subscription. Also, Burt says she was commissioned on 16 June.
      • "Naval and Military Intelligence," The Times, 5 June, 1914, p. 14. This gels with the Navy List which is specific about when a ship commissions or otherwise (or doesn't mention it, especially during the war).
        • Thanks, corrected now.
  • Marlborough joined the First Fleet of the Home Fleets, not Home Fleet, which was renamed Grand Fleet on the outbreak of war. Given she was already flying Sir Lewis Bayly's flag in the Fleet by 30 June then she was already "fully commissioned."
    • Burt just calls it the Home Fleet, which is how I've always seen it - but added a reference to Bayly.
      • It was the officially the Home Fleets from 1912 to 1914.
        • Ok, added the "s".
  • When she joined the Fleet she wasn't the flagship of the deputy commander - Bayly was junior to the Vice-Admiral Commanding the Second Battle Squadron, Warrender, on whom supreme command would have devolved.
    • So what is Burt referring to when he says "2nd flag, Home Fleet"?
      • No idea. But Marlborough wouldn't be the flagship of the second-most senior officer in the First/Grand Fleet until 19 December, 1914, when Burney hoisted his flag in her. So Burt's pretty much wrong.
        • Odd that Burt's confused, but I suppose nobody's perfect.
  • Burney didn't become Second-in-Command of the Grand Fleet until August, 1915.
    • Wouldn't Warrender still have been senior until he left in December?
      • Burney was senior to Warrender. At any rate the title of Second-in-Command was more a method of delegating certain administrative functions in port. Jellicoe knew full well that if anything happened to him anyone could be appointed to succeed him in the long run (as eventually happened when Beatty was appointed in 1916).
        • Fair enough.
  • Post-War: Unless Marlborough was decommissioned then "recommissioned at Devonport" would be better.
    • Fixed per Sturm's comment above.
  • 4th and 3rd Squadrons: 4th and 3rd Battle Squadrons presumably. Seems incredible Burt got that wrong. —Simon Harley (Talk | Library). 10:52, 28 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments

Support: generally looks quite good. I only have one minor point to raise:

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