Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Frank Lukis
Frank Lukis edit
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Another RAAF bio I took to GA a while back but which I felt could go the next level with a bit more work. This chap served in both world wars but, though he did achieve senior command in the second, never quite made it beyond acting/temporary one-star rank. An interesting character though, one of many IMHO of course in the annals of Australian military aviation. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:17, 15 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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- Is Port Morseby the same as Port Moresby?
- The latter, tks for spotting the typo.
- Harry Cobby is identified as a group captain in the caption, but as an air commodore in article text
- The picture (and its description by the Australian War Memorial) have him as Group Captain but the official history I cited said Air Commodore. Consulting a further source I see he was Group Captain at the time he took over and promoted to Air Commodore after about 9 months in the job -- altered to effectively reflect this.
- "sacked" is probably a bit colloquial
- Well, many of the sources, even official histories, use this word -- would prefer to leave it if it's not too big a deal...
- Both paragraphs in World War II are on the long side, you might consider splitting one or both
- Yeah, was thinking that myself after I completed the pre-ACR expansion. Let me see what else needs to be altered during the course of the review and I'll revisit it then.
- Richie or Ritchie? Nikkimaria (talk) 00:39, 17 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Support
- No dabs [1] (no action required)
- External links check out [2] (no action required)
- Images all have alt text [3] (no action required)
- Citation error tool reveals no errors (no action required)
- Images are all PD and seem appropriate for the article (no action required)
- Maybe wikilink 10th Light Horse Regiment? (suggestion only)
- Excellent suggestion -- I can only assume there was no article for the unit when I first wrote this...
- Maybe consider splitting the two long paragraphs in the World War II section? (suggestion only)
- Fair enough; see my reply to Nikki above.
- Overall, this is a well written biography that meets all of the A class criteria IMO. Well done. Anotherclown (talk) 09:41, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Support: looks good to me, Ian. I only have a couple of suggestions:
- "No. 1 Squadron" is linked twice (once in Early and once in Between the wars) - not major, but it might be considered overlinked;
- Quite right, tks.
- "charge of No. 1 Aircraft Depot at RAAF Station Laverton, Victoria in 1936" (might need a comma after Victoria);
- Yup.
- "he held this post for the duration of the Pacific War" (perhaps replace "duration" with "remainder"?);
- Yes, that's better. I think "duration" can mean "remainder" in context, but better to make it crystal clear.
- for the Helson entry in the References section, you might be able to use {{cite thesis}} instead of {{cite journal}}. AustralianRupert (talk) 12:45, 1 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- "No. 1 Squadron" is linked twice (once in Early and once in Between the wars) - not major, but it might be considered overlinked;
- Support. I didn't have time for my usual fine-toothed comb, but reading it through didn't throw up any issues. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 13:20, 4 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Support - article looks to be in excellent condition, I could find nothing wrong with it. Images all PD from Australia, no problems there. Parsecboy (talk) 14:49, 5 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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