Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Battle of Dyrrhachium (1081)
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Battle of Dyrrachium (1081) edit
This article recently passed GAC and I think that it could be of A-class quality. All comments welcome. Kyriakos 22:01, 21 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Comment(s)
- The alignment of the quote box in the section prelude is being shoved way to far to the right by the map picture above it (note that i have my moniter alignment at 1024xthe other number). If you could fix that it would be great.
- "Attacking with their massive battle axes, the Varangians attacked the Norman knights, who were driven away after their horses panicked." This sentence uses the word "attack" twice, it would be best if you could find another word to substitute in place of one of the two "attacks". I will not oppose for this, its just a preference of mine.
OK, thanks for the feedback. I have removed the image futher up and to the left and I have also remove the first attack. Kyriakos 06:06, 22 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. Carom 20:31, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. Good work. Cla68 21:38, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. Eurocopter tigre 13:21, 25 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Great lead-in and great text flow; needs minor work:
- Content
- Varangians needs some slight amplification in the lead— it is not quite clear whose side they were on; expand as "Varangian mercenaries" or "Varangian auxiliaries" or whatever is appropriate
- Lead says "He left his son Bohemond", I think "he" is Robert but this needs to be made clear
- "Robert soon left Avalona and sailed to the island of Corfu, which surrendered." Why did Corfu surrender?
- Style
- Needs hatnote to other battle
- "17th-18th": don't use ordinals per WP:MOSDATE, I think this should be 17 October?
- "crack troops" sounds a bit slangish, perhaps "elite" would be better
- Images
- Recommended that free images use the {{information}} template to ensure that all of the required information is in place
- References
- There are really only three sources used here, this may be considered rather light; if there are no other good sources don't try to force it
- Recommend that references are formatted with citation templates. This method is not mandatory, but is considered a best practice.
--Gadget850 ( Ed) 23:05, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I have clarified all the issues in the content and style section. Current I can not find any other good sources but I am searching and hope to have a few more soon. Also with the style of the citation I like the way it currently is. Tell me if you have any problems. Thanks. Kyriakos 08:52, 24 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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