Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/20th Engineer Brigade (United States)
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Closed as Not promoted --ROGER DAVIES talk 06:08, 7 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Self-Nomination The article is a good GA, and has improved substantially over the past few months. -Ed! (talk) 15:51, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Comment looks promising but relies almost entirely on government/military sites as sources. Talking about the "enemy" (as in "destroyed over 6000 enemy bunkers") is POV. It also has many niggly little copy problems and needs a close copy edit.
- Use of (Combat)(Airborne) with no intervening space looks strange.
- Various day/month dates need wikilinking.
- Copy edit for punctuation (apostrophes; hyphens "7,700 soldier force" > "7,700-soldier force"; abbreviations: "U.S." > "US"; etc
- Not all units of measurement are converted: these need doing, including "one million tons of munitions".
- --ROGER DAVIES talk 21:40, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- About the (Combat)(Airborne) thing, the problem is that that is the unit's official name, with both designations in seperate parenthises.There really isn't any other way to put it; that's what the unit is formally called. -Ed! (talk) 22:44, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Comment 'Unit' should be 'formation' throughout. Did you run this through a MILHIST peer review? Buckshot06 (talk) 23:32, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- No, I was under the impression that the A-class review would come with enough advice on its own. -Ed! (talk) 01:42, 3 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah, no. An A-class review will be much more cursory. --ROGER DAVIES talk 04:07, 3 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Comment(s)
- Is the information cited int he intro paragraph presented in the article body? If so, I would recommend removing the citation from the intro and citing the corrosponding info in the article body.
- In the intro you have the following lines: "The brigade supported American forces for several years and a dozen campaigns of the Vietnam War, but was deactivated shortly after American forces withdrew from the country. Reactivated in 1967..." If memory serves, we (by which I mean the US) were still in Vietnam in 1967. This needs to be clarified.
- Decide on a date format. You have an interchanging DD/MM/YYYY and MM/DD/YYYY format in the article, which according to MoS guidelines in unacceptable; it needs to be all the former style or all the latter. Additionaly, all dates formatted in this manner should be linked.
- If you are citing an entire paragraph to a single source, consider putting only one cite at the end of the paragraph.
- Its a good start, but it still needs work; nonetheless I commend you for getting this far. TomStar81 (Talk) 07:54, 5 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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