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Vithoba edit

I soon aim to nominate GA Vithoba for FAC. I would like suggestions to improve the article to FA status. Also, i request some copyeditor to go through the article to polish the language, if needed.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 12:13, 6 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • Vitthala(Sanskrit --> Space needed
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • First sentence is long. Split
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Vithoba is the main focus of the monotheistic non-Brahminical Varkari sect --> Could you clarify it? "focus"?
focus in the sense "A center of interest or activity"--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • generally considered --> peacock term/weasel term. WP:AWT
Most authors like Monier Williams Sanskrit-English Dictionary and religious leaders associate Vithoba with Vishnu or Krishna (a Vaishnava deity) but few groups relate him with Shiva and Buddha. So "generally considered" is used.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Pandharpur, Maharashtra. --> Pandharpur in Maharashtra.
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Aratis --> lower case
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hastings too supports, Khare suggests "Vitthala -- > who are these people. Mention the designations/authority. eg Historian Hastings etc (global comment)
All of them are authors or religious scholars for sure, historian? one may or may not know. Adding "scholar XYZ" before every name may make the text repetitive. Even FA Ganesha uses "Martin-Dubost says..", "Krishan notes that..", "Paul Courtright says that...", "..as Robert Brown explains.."--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • epithet of Rudra-Shiva. --> context needed. What is Rudra Shiva? expand the sentence.
god added.
  • "Pandurang Stotra -> do not use an external link in text. (even it is in another wikipedia)
removed.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Adi Shankaracharya --> context needed
"hymn "Pandurang Stotra" by Adi Shankaracharya, if genuine, establishes that Vithoba worship existed as early as 9th century AD, the period of its author." context as author of Pandurang Stotra
  • "The Cult of Vithoba" --> while not incorrect, title names should be ideally italicised instead of using quotes.
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • chief temple at Pandharpur. --> was this the first known temple?
Yes. Clarified. --Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • often disputed --> by whom?
By scholars. "The historicity of Pundalik is often disputed. While some scholars believe him to be a historical figure, others dismiss him as a mythical figure." Sentence reworded.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • some scholars --> again another weasel term. Do a global check
Sentence reworded.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Varkaris do not merely consider --> rewrite litote into positive tone
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Dhangars --> context
"Vithoba ... worshipped first as Dhangar (a shepherd, cowherd community) deity." and the Shiva connection.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Dr. Ambedkar, --> BR Ambedkar
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Buddhist convert --> is 'convert' necessary?
To establish context with Buddha. fact is he was a Hindu converted to Buddhist.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • ( Hindu --> remove space
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sect: Varkari Panth --> Odd title
renamed "Varkari sect".--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Historicity of --> Remove from title
Nice suggestion. Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • A map of the main temple would be a good addition
I do not have a such PD image, though if anyone is interested to create one, i can provide a source.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:19, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remove bullets under =Temples=
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...temples in towns like..." --> like ->> such as
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Kartik shukla eleventh --> not helpful to a global reader
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:48, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • 24 ekadashis --> context
Ekadashis as noted are sacred days for Vithoba.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:50, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The main temple of Vithoba and his consort Rakhumai --> unlink
Linked to only main temple. Link provided only in the beginning.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The article has too many terms for a person not familiar about the topic to read. Context should be provided so that the user does not have to click on every non English term in the sentence.
I have tried to provide the meanings in brackets as much as possible. If certain sentences are pointed out, i can work on it.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:19, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Balance the images. Too many clustered up in certain sections
Changed placement of imgs.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 05:52, 8 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Origins and development --> Development???
  • 11th --> superscript not needed
Doing--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Legend needs a copyedit
  • The main temple can also have the coordinates supplied.
Done.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 14:10, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

=Nichalp «Talk»= 16:35, 6 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. Working on it.--Redtigerxyz (talk) 13:08, 7 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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