Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Pat Buchanan

Pat Buchanan edit

Just got assessed as A-class; would appreciate comments and criticisms. I think the article could use some pruning and editing, but would like to hear some feedback from other Wikipedians. Thanks! Schi 17:28, 23 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Nat91 edit

Very detailed article. In my opinion, the article is too long. 126 KB is too much. It has too many stubby sections that could be edited into one, for example, "Early life." I know we're talking about a politician, but the article seems to have too many quotes. You could keep the essential ones and the others could be turned into prose. Nat91 04:53, 24 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou edit

I agree that the article is too long. I think it should become a bit more tight in general. For instance there are many sections, sub-sections etc. some of which are stubby. I suggest you merge some of them, without deleting essential information. Sme problem with the too many quotes: They are far too many and long. As Nat91 said, keep only the important ones and try to incorporate some of the others within the main prose.
You have some listy sections. For FAC this is a problem. Turn them into prose.
You have about 80 inline citations and about 180 external links! Why aren't these extrernal links in your inline citations? The way you link to external links is not recommended. Transfer them in your notes and citate them properly (title, author [if there is one] or source, when they were retrieved). The same with some of the exisiting external links in "Notes", which are also not properly citated.
Some of your citations are empty. Something is wrong there.
Trivia sections are not recommended. Get rid of it and incoroporate the information in the main prose of your article.
Is this long "See also" section needed?
In general, I think the problem of the article is not the lack of information, but the proper organization of the existing information. The existence of too many sections is part of the problem.--Yannismarou 07:15, 24 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]