Wikipedia:Featured article review/Peerage/archive1

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Major review commentary

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Article no longer meets FA criteria. - FrancisTyers · 11:36, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Can you explain why it no longer meets FA crteria, it's rather ok for one of the older FAs out there. Thanks Jaranda wat's sup 00:48, 17 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

These two immediately stand out:

  • Does not exemplify 'our best work' (1)
  • No inline citations (2c)

- FrancisTyers · 10:17, 17 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I concur with Francis. —Nightstallion (?) 11:15, 19 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
So do I. In addition, it needs a good copy-edit (2a). Here are examples, taken at random:
    • "A hereditary peer is a peer whose dignity may"—repetition.
    • "Writs of summons summon an individual to Parliament, in the old feudal tradition, and merely imply the existence or creation of an hereditary peerage dignity, which is automatically inherited, presumably according to the traditional mediæval rules (male-preference primogeniture, similar to the succession of British crown)." Unwieldy snake, with "summons summon" repetition.
    • "a peerage dignity continues to exist"—Remove last two words as redundant.
    • "In former times, peerage dignities were often forfeit by Acts of Parliament,"—Vague chronological reference. Same here: "Hereditary peers were all once entitled to sit in the House of Lords,"—Once?

Tony 12:07, 20 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary

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Main FA criteria concerns are whether it represents our best work (1) and citations (2c). Marskell 10:53, 3 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]