Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Removal from the Order of Canada/Attempt 1

Removal from the Order of Canada edit

Self nom: another article fork from the Featured Article Order of Canada. However, as a word of caution: WP:WIAFA requirement 5 allows for FA's not to have pictures. However, because of this, I know it will not be Featured on the front page and I can easily accept that fact, mainly since the main article is featured. Zscout370 (Sound Off) 20:54, 2 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

I've added the Seal to this page. -- user:zanimum
- Cool thanks. Zscout370 (Sound Off) 17:08, 3 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
~~Conditional~~ Support It looks good, however I have a few problems, first I think a phrase needs to be bold in the introduction. Second I think the whole section about David Ahenakew became confusing. The last, very long paragraph needs to be seperated into at least two seperate paragraphs. And this sentence: "Ahenakew could be using the same tatic Eagleson used..." is speculative, who is speculating this? The Notes section should be renamed to accurately state the information it contains. Also where does ref 17 in Notes lead? --MechBrowman 17:24, August 4, 2005 (UTC)
Ref 17 is supposed to be going to note 13, but I need to fix the templates. Second, I removed the sentece you discussed and I split the paragraph. I will probably go over the paragraph and write the whole thing. Also, what should be bolded in the lead section? Zscout370 (Sound Off) 17:35, 4 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
- I think either "honour revoked" or "formal removal process" would work --MechBrowman 01:19, August 5, 2005 (UTC)
  - I bolded "formal removal process." Zscout370 (Sound Off) 01:24, 5 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
- Looks good, but Notes section still needs to be renamed into something more appropriate, something that describes the content of that section. Ex: Other ways to leave --MechBrowman 13:58, August 5, 2005 (UTC)
  - I can fix that. Zscout370 (Sound Off) 17:45, 5 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Support. -- user:zanimum