Wikipedia:Cleanup Taskforce/The Sims 2: Open for Business

The Sims 2: Open for Business edit

The article needs:

To be brought into present tense over future.
POV stripped out. Computerjoe 's talk 10:10, 2 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Added to User:Jaxl/Desk Added to User:Loco830/Desk'

I took a look at this article out of boredom, and spent a few hours fixing up its use of second person, passive voice and future tense (I was really bored :P ). It no longer appears to need language cleanup, and I don't see any real NPOV violations; I've therefore removed the Cleanup tag. Just thought I should point this out, in case you wanted to remove it from your desk or check my edits for yourself. RandyWang 01:23, 24 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, I cleaned out blatant POV. Computerjoe 's talk 08:26, 24 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

This article's starting to look little better than a shopping list of new features. Please take a look at the talk page for a slightly more detailed explanation: I propose we condense the points in those lists, and/or place much of the same information in meaningful prose, if you agree that it would be an improvement. RandyWang 11:40, 25 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Added to User:Bibliomaniac15/Desk RJFJR 03:23, 13 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I honestly don't know a lot about the Sims, but I love searching for grammatical and formatting errors. Bibliomaniac15 23:46, 23 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Closed RJFJR 13:49, 18 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]