User talk:Zachglee/sandbox

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Angelina1209

I think your article is really well organized, but I would suggest that you create separate sub-headings for the years covered in the Evolution section, and maybe more sub-headings if any significant new tasks were added throughout the years. The "See also" section and the photos work well with the article and are helpful to the reader. Kellyg320 (talk) 16:39, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

There were some points where you marked citations needed and I would agree that for the more subjective statements about the motivations/goals of the competition, citations are needed. It might be tricky finding citations that aren't created by the competition itself to prevent bias/too many "first person" sources. Kellyg320 (talk) 16:39, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Going forward, (I'm not sure if you're already planning this) it would be really interesting to include a section on how some of the team's inventions were applied to other projects in the future (maybe a "Lasting impacts"/"Outside applications"/"Notable applications" type of section). I'm assuming you'll be filling out the year to year evolution section as well, which will definitely improve the article. In general, there are some minor wording/grammar mistakes. Kellyg320 (talk) 16:39, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Your article definitely reminded me that I need to add a "see also" section! Kellyg320 (talk) 16:39, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

It might be interesting to include the most recent winner's project and provide some general info about their rover and how it works (what tasks it can complete, how it would be helpful to astronauts on mars, etc). Angelina1209 (talk) 16:35, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Angelina1209Reply

The pictures provide good visual representations to support the information presented in the article and are helpful to understanding each of the sections they correspond to. Angelina1209 (talk) 16:47, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Angelina1209Reply

Overall, the article is well organized and the information added really improved the original article. I would suggest adding a section at the end to somehow include the future of these projects or possibly how they could impact the future of the field. Angelina1209 (talk) 16:54, 24 October 2018 (UTC)Angelina1209Reply