User talk:Ychzhang17/sandbox
[Tae]
1. I think some sentences are a little bit long. I suggest that they could be broken into 2-3 sentences so that your explanation will be more clear. ex 1) The molar differential heat of dilution refers to as the enthalpy change caused by one mole of additional solvent diluted by the mass solvent at a constant temperature and pressure, while the concentration of the mass solvent remains unchanged, mathematically as (where ξ denotes the molality of the dilution)
ex 2) The molar integral heat of dilution is defined as the enthalpy change (normalized by molality of diluting some solution from the initial concentration to the final concentration by adding the solvent, mathematically as:
2. In other words, the heat of dilution results from the non-ideality of the solution..(two dots)
3. the breaking of attraction between solute molecules, the breaking of attraction (is there different word to express variously instead of two same "breaking of attraction " in the one sentences)
[Maggie]
1. change "refers to as" -->refers to 2. maybe add some explanation about what the differences between integral and differentiate models are, e.g., these two models are used under different conditions
[Eric]
These both look like good topics, Yuchen. I'm a little surprised that you say the first is lacking in notability; you may use Chinese sources as well, although you will have to translate them, obviously. Are there really no more sources?
The second also looks like a good choice, and the practice in explaining the jargon would be good for you, as would just writing in your field.
I will leave it up to you. best, Eric EricGrunwald (talk) 21:41, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
[Taeyoung]
3. Note at least three things that you like and are done well.
- Trying to be objective
- Definition of terminology
- Reliable resources
4. Note at least two things regarding the content (not grammar) that you think could be improved. These could include: explanations are unclear, context that is unexplained and thus unclear, terms that are not explained well enough, explanations that are incomplete, places where the citations are unclear or missing, terms/names that you think probably have their own Wikipedia pages and should thus be linked.
- It needs to be announced that this article refers the the dilution process of pure components only.
- The citation of “Dilution & Solution” is necessary. — Preceding unsigned comment added by TaeyoungYoon (talk • contribs) 19:07, 2 May 2017 (UTC)