User talk:Yaz.17/sandbox

Hi Yasmine (I hope I spelled your name right :)),

I really enjoyed your evaluation of the article titled "Religion", and I appreciated that you included an introduction sentence that clarified that you were merely adding on to the original article, mainly focusing on religious deities.

However, I think there can be room to expand upon your explanations just a tad. For example, I think it would have been interesting to add the different subsections of Buddhism, such as Mahayana Buddhism, Theravada Buddhism, and Vajrayana Buddhism. My reasoning for this, is because in your first sentence under the Buddhism section of your evaluation, you explained that Buddhism lacks a central deity, however, Mahayana Buddhists often regard Siddhartha Gautama (the Buddha) as a deity, whereas Theravada Buddhists do not. Additionally, I enjoy the fact that you explain the three main deities of Hinduism, however, I think by adding a subsection elaborating about the different avatars, and how each deity may have various avatars. For instance, how Krishna is regarded to be an incarnation of the deity Vishnu.

Other than these minor critiques, I believe you did an amazing job! :) Ericneumann 99 (talk) 01:20, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Hey! Your article looks great and it has a great amount of details and factual information. Here are some suggestions: The quote in the Buddhism section is a bit long for a wikipedia article. Maybe you can shorten it or try paraphrasing the idea?

I think you should add more detail on the connection between confucianism and the Tao, how they are connected in beliefs.

In the hinduism section, you should try making it more neutral and maybe take out phrases like "on the other hand."

 Rita Butrus (talk) 05:14, 20 October 2018 (UTC)