User talk:XiuyeYu/sandbox
Review
editXiuyeYu, definitely a good start, but there is much to be done. I implemented some of the suggestions myself in your lead.
- Improve awkward and ungrammatical phrases.
- Fix typos and mispellings.
- Include citations to the sources of your claims.
- Be careful of editorializing.
- Remove some of the detail such as hours of business and phone numbers as that is likely change over time and isn't appropriate for an encyclopedia.
We can discuss more here or in person. -Reagle (talk) 16:10, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
Hi, Xiuye Yu, I think your article contains lots of details which is good! And what I recommend is that you may add a picture if you can find it. Also, you can be more neutral when you writing the history part, because it really sounds like your personal experiences in some extents. Similarly, you can focus more on its development and achievements compare with the food itself. It may help the article looks more neutral and professional. At last, I think you may try to include more citations to the source which others may find difficult to understand. All in all, I think you did a great job in general.
Vishare Huang (talk) 20:29, 31 March 2019 (UTC)