User talk:X.Kyrstenn.x/Desire Area, New Orleans

Draft Feedback

You're doing some really great work here on the Desire Area. Some of your historical material is really insightful and goes well beyond the basics. This seems to be coming along nicely. The most urgent thing is to get those citations included. It's a really bad habit to leave those until after you've done the writing.

Be careful with the tone you are using. The section on the Black Panthers is coming across as a bit too informal, almost biased. You need to keep a neutral, informative tone throughout the article.

Keep up the good work!

JT: (talk) 16:40, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

Thank you Dr. Todd! I just included the citations you were talking about. I had reviewed the citation training to make sure I was inserting them properly.I have been attempting to revise the Black Panther section and that is my main focus paragraph editing this week . Making sure that I make sure it remains neutral. Thank you so much for your feedback ! X.Kyrstenn.x (talk) 07:52, 18 March 2021 (UTC)