User talk:Vkasimir/sandbox

Hey there, I particularly thought you made this article very neutral. I feel any bias towards characters while reading. The two clickable citations worked. This is a good start. My only critiques:

1. "The Lady’s Museum, in which she first serialized Sophia, to essays on sentimentalism and moral philosophy." I think you could phrase this better. I'm not quite sure what you mean by "to essays on..." If you mean to use the verb versions of "essay," perhaps just take out "to."

2. "Young Sophia gets courted by Sir Charles, Does not respond well, goes out to the country to find herself, reconciles with Sir Charles, gets married and lives a happy life." I enjoy the simplicity of this summarization, but I feel as if this would fit in its own section. I think adding this under a summarization heading would be very informative.

3. I like the major and minor character breakdown, beautifully written. You will just need to add some semi-colons or commas after names to fix grammatical errors.

I noticed you have unfilled sections for Literary significance, Development, and Major themes in both your sandbox and live page. I think this would strengthen your article if you were to fill these out. Also, if you could find a picture of the book, that would be cool!

-Andrew Selevos (ENG 495) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aselevos (talk • contribs) 03:56, 14 December 2017 (UTC)