User talk:Userart105/Monreale Cathedral mosaics

Latest comment: 1 month ago by KhaliaM in topic Peer Review

Peer Review edit

Hello Bailey, so sorry for the late response to your sandbox, completely slipped my mind til the last minute.

First off, I see compared to the original article you were able to add a substantial amount of information, including headings that the article did not have before.

I love how simple your lead is, and its narrowed down greatly compared to the original article. Your article is neutral and does not give me any idea of your personal stance on the topic which is great.

The description section is well done with lots of information, and is very easy for me to read and understand it. If I were to change anything, it seems like some content regarding Iconography listed in your description heading could be put in the iconography heading, especially the details about Christ. Because you have subjects as a heading, I think bc those come with lots of iconography history, you can add a heading about iconography as well. Possibly making it a subheading. Subjects seems like an important topic especially in religious architecture, so adding more information here would be fabulous.

The addition of the Chemical heading is something I'm a bit confused by and feels out of place, although if you do enjoy it as a topic, it may be nice to add research about why it is being researched, because for now by reading that section I have no idea on why it needs to be added so far. I also think more can be added in this section if you continue with it. I also think the order in which it is placed could change as well because it has to do with the information listed in the description, so maybe as a subheading for materials would be better.

I admire that you added a few more sources, being the original article only used 2 continuously. I would although still make sure to find more sources to use, and referencing multiple sources in the process. Please keep up the great work :)

Again my apologies for the late review.

KhaliaM (talk) 04:53, 7 April 2024 (UTC)Reply