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Justine's Peer Review of Ball Culture Edit

Do I feel satisfied that I know the importance of the topic? Yes

Looking at the lead again after reading the rest of the article, does the lead reflect the most important information? Yes

Does the lead give more weight to certain parts of the article over others? Is anything missing? Is anything redundant? The edit feels pretty well balanced with the rest of the article.

Are the sections organized well, in a sensible order? Would they make more sense presented some other way (chronologically, for example)?Is each section's length equal to its importance to the article's subject? Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic? This section is well organized in a sensible order. The section’s length is equal to the importance of the article’s subject. Everything in the edit is on topic with the subject of the article.

Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view? The article tells information about vogueing in ballroom culture. The article is not bias, but informs.

Does the article make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people? For example, "some people say..." No

Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors? They are from a reliable source.

First, what does the article do well? The article introduces a dance movement that was popular in the 70 and 80s ballroom culture. The section does well to inform. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? I can only see one source listed, unless I just don’t see the others. I would like to see more sources added in the edit.

Over all, I think this was a good edit. It explains what vogueing is and where it comes from. I think that more sourced could be added, unless I just couldn’t see them on wiki.

Tiffany's Feedback on Ball Culture.

I understand your comments to the Wikipedia site. I actually wasn't sure what to put and how to edit it. I will take your recommendations and with my group I will help to edit and make the changes. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Tmancino241 (talk • contribs) 15:29, 29 November 2018 (UTC)