User talk:Tiarahs2024/Shafiq-Uz-Zaman Khan

My peer review for Tiarahs2024

Lead Section Evaluation

The lead section effectively highlights Ustaad Shafiq-uz-Zaman's significance in the field of calligraphy, emphasizing his contribution to Islamic art. It sets a positive tone for the article, presenting Zaman as an influential figure. However, it could benefit from specifying some key achievements or recognitions to give readers a clearer picture of his stature and influence in the field right from the beginning.

Structure and Organization

The article is structured around Zaman's journey, his role in Islamic art, and his contributions to the field, ending with his legacy. The flow from background to specific accomplishments and impact is logical. Still, the article could be improved by adding subheadings for easier navigation, such as "Early Life," "Career," "Contributions to Islamic Art," and "Legacy and Influence."

Balance and Neutrality

The article maintains a respectful and appreciative tone towards Zaman and his work. However, to ensure neutrality, it's essential to avoid language that might seem overly laudatory without critical evaluation. Phrases like "leaving an indelible mark" or "captivating audiences worldwide" could be perceived as subjective unless supported by third-party sources that attest to his global recognition and impact.

Source Reliability

The references cited (Parhlo News, a mention of Pakistan's soft image through calligraphy, and a publication announcement from thenews.com.pk) are relevant to the subject matter. However, the draft could be strengthened by incorporating additional sources, such as academic journals, books on Islamic calligraphy, or interviews with Zaman himself, to provide a more comprehensive view of his work and its significance. I believe that the proffessor told us to find 4 sources to put in our bibliography.

To Sum It All Up:

1. Clarify Achievements in the Lead: Introduce specific achievements or awards early to anchor his reputation.
2. Expand on the Biography: More details about his early life, training, and any challenges overcome would enrich the narrative.
3. Enhance the Article with Subheadings: Improve readability and organization by dividing the content into clearly defined sections.
4. Support Claims with Diverse Sources: Broaden the source base to include academic or notable publications in the field of Islamic art.

UaPro (talk) 23:16, 7 April 2024 (UTC)