User talk:StefanO/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Ana Estrada in topic Peer Review - Ana Estrada

Peer review from Leah

What does the article (or section) do well?

This article (section?) does a good job of setting a foundation for what will be discussed in the third paragraph. You also do a good job in providing information in a neutral voice.

What changes would you suggest overall?

I am unsure if this is a full article or a section on an article. This piece felt really long as it wasn't broken up at all into subsections. I would suggest trying to find more of structure and grouping similar topics together into subsections. If this is just a part of an article, maybe shorten it or make it more succinct. Also, add sources/references.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?

Add references and make it more structured.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!

This topic is not really related to my topic at all but is very interesting!

Peer Review - Ana Estrada

edit

What does the article (or section) do well? I like his contribution to the article. I think it is a good point to the while article. He also use good sources for his contributions.

What changes would you suggest overall? I think you need to add some more information and suggestions to the article, and definitely I will try to add some graphs or tables reflecting the data and the trends you are taking about, so the audience can get a better understanding of what you are talking about.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? As I mention before, I think it is important to add more information to the topic, as it is a very interesting one and the article it is not that extensive

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I like the way he relates the main topic (generational gap) with his main point (workplace differences) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ana Estrada (talkcontribs) 02:50, 27 October 2016 (UTC)Reply