User talk:Sophiavick/sandbox

Author's Note

I have added a new section called Ms. Magazine, I created cites for each sentence and I correct spelling errors. I would like to touch up some sentences by making them longer but content wise I am done adding more information or sources. I am most proud of the information I have added on considering there was not a lot to work with. I found information relatively easy to find and sources reliable, there are just some topics that have limited source options. I would like feedback on sentence structures and if there needs to be more information added to the magazine section. I also would appreciate if my grammar was reviewed closely.

Revision suggestions

The improvements made so far are outstanding. Overall, as you noted just add the missing citations. The structure is well thought out, and from what I can see your grammar is pretty spot on. The first paragraph sounds a tad robotic, but the flow from the second paragraph on down is very well written. The only information that I am curious is about, is how feminist businesses are being conducted today. Some information on current feminist businesses, perhaps? Great job. Livingserendipity (talk) 22:20, 17 April 2018 (UTC)

You have made a lot of improvements. Overall the process is great the why it flows it great. Citations maybe look over them a bit. But, so far you are being very neutral and providing backup for what you are saying. RealWorldddddTalk (talk) 16:10, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review

This is a great article for the women's movement. In the section you created for Ms. Magazine I would add where the headquarters is located and maybe list other members names of the Ms. Magazine team and a picture of Gloria. Expanding on what the Women's Action Alliance and National Women's Political Caucus is all about would be a good addition. The only error I saw in this section was Gloria's first name was spelled as Gold in the last sentence. Great job and well done!Angelfeathers6 (talk) 14:30, 18 April 2018 (UTC)