User talk:Shaskyarw/sandbox

Feedback

• In the actual article, don't discuss why you chose the topic. Keep it factual and avoid using the first-person point of view.
• I like how you lay out what will be discussed and its importance. It gives the reader a clear idea of what to expect.
• Make sure to review grammatical errors such as run-on sentences and comma placements when needed.
• How will you condense the information to not go over the word count? The subtopics are good, but it seems like it will require a lot of information to thoroughly get the point across. Something to think about as you're writing.
• The annotated bibliography and the articles used are the exact same, so delete one of the sections. Also, "Indigenous Language Policy and Education in Mexico" is repeated.
• Add more information to your annotated bibliography. Include the author when describing the details of the articles instead of constantly saying "They address..".

GHS1226 (talk) 22:48, 27 November 2021 (UTC)

Peer Review Links by Shaskya

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Abz123m/sandbox https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User_talk:Faata_Rizantara/sandbox — Preceding unsigned comment added by Shaskyarw (talk • contribs) 19:44, 3 December 2021 (UTC)

Response to Peer Assessment

Thank you very much for the inputs. I will try to restructure my article, laying out the ideas orderly according to the subtopics. Other than the three subtopics I have stated before; I would like to add another subtopic which is the history of indigenous language policy in Mexico. I would also like to search for more articles about the policy about the indigenous language policy applied in the country and how it affects the policy applied in schools. The input for adding images will also be considered. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Shaskyarw (talk • contribs) 22:37, 6 December 2021 (UTC)