User talk:Shaphiu/sandbox

Latest comment: 9 years ago by TheRedPenOfDoom in topic Comments

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The overall structure appears sound and contents appear to be sourced and the sources in general seem to be of good quality so this is very much on the right track.

I do see a couple of WP:PEACOCK expressions such as "veteran" , some uses of "the singer" where Singh or "he" would be better, and you cannot extrapolate critics agreed that "Singh shines like a diamond in these types of romantic track" from a single reviewer. and you dont want to use "it was the first time blah blah" unless there is a second that has happened. but mostly it looks good. -- TRPoD aka The Red Pen of Doom 13:41, 25 February 2015 (UTC)Reply