Jeff's Peer Review - Informalism
Overview/Intro - Your lead is straightforward, clear, and concise. All information in this section is relevant to the topic and not distracting. One note, the introductory paragraph should briefly address all of the important points that your article will discuss. You do this pretty well. I would maybe add one sentence to the introduction that describes the thematic characteristics of Informalism. Are there any principles or ideas associated with informalism that you can refer to in the lead? (maybe summarize in 1 sentence the style of Informalism? What artistic concepts/ideals does Informalism emphasize? I learned that informalism is characterized by freedom of expression, abstraction, gestural painting, uncontrolled, spontaneous, random, chance, chaos, rebellion, starts with symbols and moves backwards to a derived meaning, maybe that could help?)
History - In regards to content, I think this is your strongest section. You do a good job of tracking the birth of the movement. I like the chronology of your history section. I also like the bit about Informalism developing as a reaction to the "post-WWII realities of poverty and despair." This seems like a critical piece of information, great to see it included. I know you are already aware of this but be mindful of citations. Anything that is not a widely known fact must be cited, and you have a lot of information here that needs to be cited according to Wikipedia's standards. Also, there are some issues with awkward phrasing you might want to look over. (i.e. Instead of saying “After Second War World (WWII) painters…,” maybe you could write, "After WWII, French painters/artists/ the French art community?) Is it a movement associated mainly with France?
Pictorial Practices - I would think about possibly renaming this section. This section describes the actual characteristics and techniques used in Informalist art (i.e. paint splatters, random strokes/drips etc, avoiding drawing/sketching). This section also describes the values, ideas, and conceptual characteristics associated with Informalism. I would recommend using a heading/title that sort of generally encompasses the characteristics of Informalism. ("Themes," "Style," even "Characteristics of Informalism" etc.)
One final suggestion: Watch out for the tone and cadence of your voice in the article. You do a great job of maintaining a scholarly and objective tone throughout your article, but at times it might be a bit too wordy and laborious to read. For example, look at this passage from you article: "Plastic characteristics of this painting are: spontaneity of the gesture, automatism, expressive use of material, the nonexistence of preconceived ideas, the experience that the deed generates the idea, and the work is the place and the privileged moment whereby the artist discovers himself; it is the end of the reproduction of the object for the representation of the theme that becomes the end of the painting, with a sometime calligraphic aspect, referring to a Calligraphic Abstraction in relation to the works of Georges Mathieu, Hans Hartung, or Pierre Soulages." This is one, extremely long sentence. It is also a bit difficult to understand, especially for someone not familiar with calligraphic abstraction or automatism. I don't know if you wrote this or if it was part of the article before you were assigned this topic, but I might consider making the wording in this section less complicated.
Overall, you've got a solid draft here Jeff! Keep up the good work bud
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