User talk:RJSteed/Abnormal psychology
Just reviewed your article, good work overall. Added some suggestions for you to take into account as you move forward.
Hello Will590, I created subheadings for each of the family systems concentrations, and talked a little more about play therapy.RJSteed (talk) 01:25, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
Hi RJSteed! I just reviewed your article and left feedback in a Peer Review sandbox! Great work! Bedrum00 (talk) 18:26, 28 February 2021 (UTC)
Hello Bedrum00, added more information about the controversial nature of play therapy. I will also mention more about family systems therapy.RJSteed (talk) 01:25, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
Hi! I left feedback in the peer review sandbox https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RJSteed/Abnormal_psychology/Csanherz_Peer_Review , but overall, I said your information was good, and I had some suggestions such as splitting the "Humanistic Therapy" section into 2, with "Play Therapy" being the 2nd section because if kept how it is, your added paragraph becomes redundant because the "Humanistic Therapy" section already talks about play therapy. (Csanherz (talk) 22:30, 28 February 2021 (UTC))
Hello Csanherz, I added the splitting of Humanistic therapy that you suggested, and talked more about controversial aspects. I will also edit the abnormal psychology definition, and mention therapy earlier on.RJSteed (talk) 01:25, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
Hey RJSteed! As I read your article for peer review, I was definitely able to related your changes to the rest of the article. I believe you chose a great place to add contributions. One thing I noticed however was the last sentence in the paragraph about Play Therapy, doesn't seem to flow as well as the rest of the paragraph. Im not sure if the sentence should be removed entirely or reworded to flow better for a transition. Also, under family systems therapies the paragraph starts off great but then abruptly changes subject from what this therapy is to what are some of the best practices for this therapy and then finally to how the treatment should be utilized. I believe if you were to expand on each of these sections by just a few sentences, it would give the reader a greater understanding of what exactly this therapy is and how it should be administered. Keep up the good work! CannonCH (talk) 01:36, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
HelloCannonCh altered the final sentence in the play therapy paragraph, altered the wording in the family systems therapy paragraph, and added sentences for better flow.RJSteed (talk) 01:25, 10 March 2021 (UTC)