User talk:Psych480Student/sandbox

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Ian (Wiki Ed) in topic Feedback

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@Psych480Student, Sydneyhofmann, and JordanPorteous: Nice work on your draft. I've added a few {{citation needed}} tags where citations are needed.

Some of what you've written needs to be rephrased. You use "we" quite a few times, which is something you shouldn't do in a Wikipedia article. Wikipedia articles are supposed to describe what the literature says, instead of speaking directly to the reader. Generally speaking, if you find yourself using the first or second person in a Wikipedia article, you probably aren't getting the tone right. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 00:00, 4 December 2018 (UTC)Reply