User talk:Plloren/Bimodal bilingualism

Latest comment: 2 years ago by 1mychalia1 in topic Peer Edit

Hello! After taking a look at the article, I think all of the info and topics are relevant. The article has an overall neutral view, but the wording in some areas are a bit odd. The article also mentions Deaf with a capital ‘D’ and the importance of culture, but doesn’t explain what the difference between deaf and Deaf are. There is a good balance between all of the sections. The Neurological implications section doesn’t have any subsections, but is about the same length as the other sections. There are a few grammatical errors and some of the wording/phrasing in the intro is weird. I found the wording "as a group" in the intro to be weird, but that might just be me -- maybe "as a community" would be better? There is a good variety of different citations / sources. The links work and support the points mentioned in the article. There are many sources supporting the information discussed. Each section has many citations and there’s an overall good balance between the sections. It could be helpful to include some more information in the sub-sections and expand on some of those points. Reviewing the language and ensuring its neutral would also be helpful, but otherwise it’s a good article. ----

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I think all the suggested adjustments are great! You reference bimodal bilingual education - maybe you can add a section about this? 1mychalia1 (talk) 19:30, 18 March 2022 (UTC)Reply