User talk:Ollin nahui/sandbox
Hey Ollin Nahui,
I am one of your peer reviewers for your article and hopefully can help in your contributions to the youth wiki article!
After analyzing your article, I just have a few suggestions for you to consider. I did go through and make a few minor grammar changes, but feel free to change them back if you don't like the wording or anything. No offense will be taken at all!
I think your information is very good conceptually! Great choice of sources and material. My suggestions for you would be to potentially elaborate more on the school and education subtopic. You could potentially go into more detail about the difference in schooling between more/less advanced cultures, and how western society and more so the global north influences other parts of the world for youth regarding travel and ambitions to get "a better education", and the focus on education being the way to a more successful future. you could even take some of the articles we have read for class.
My other suggestion for you is to go into more detail about youth and their self-concept. You could use chapter 6, identity of the furlong book and even ask me for more sources since I am involved in a similar topic for my article. Other than that I think your article has a lot of potential and your information so far is of great quality! Good work!