User talk:Nmhmechdesign/Portrait of Sir Robert Shirley

Peer Review

For first section: Sir Anthony van Dyck Who Did Robert Shirley Portrait

So far, I see many grammar mistakes, but it seems as though you grasp on the information you found in your sources. However, when you discuss the cloth, instead, what you can do, is make that into a separate section, such as a maybe description section or a media history section, not sure what the title could be but, you can describe the cloth in the said section. The reason why is because you were focused here on discussing the reason why van Dyck made the portrait, but then discussed the media in the portrait. Also, the title, it's really long, and this section is very informative, but it talks a lot about history. I believe you should make it a history section and keep the sub heading.

Second Section: Who is Sir Robert Shirley

Here as well, you have some minor grammar mistakes; also I noticed you typed "I did mention Robert Shirley." I suggest not writing in first person on Wikipedia, try to not even write in some sort of point of view at all, nor third person, nor first person.

Third Section: Robert Painting Display

I'm not sure if this is intentional or a mistake, but wouldn't your picture be at the beginning of your wiki page? So far, good a brief information, a few grammar mistakes here and there though. The sub heading as well, I think it should not be called museum because you are giving a brief introduction to viewers, but if you would like to discuss the museum the artwork is kept in, then you could make it a seperate section! Good job!

Jessicanjuarez (talk) 07:17, 5 April 2023 (UTC)