User talk:Mfitzgerald123456/sandbox

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jfeiks

I still need to cite/ add references (The Iliad) and add more examples.

You should watch out for your grammar, including punctuation and capitalization, in general. Also, there are a few points where your paragraphs sound like theses, instead of factual sentences, which you might want to change. The second paragraph, again, gives off the feeling of an essay instead of an information article. Overall, what you've collected is good, though I might add a bit more here and there, but I suggest you fix the wording and formation of your article paragraphs. If you can, look at examples of other gods in the Iliad, and base it off of what they are like. Just an idea! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jfeiks (talkcontribs) 05:06, 20 November 2015 (UTC)Reply