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Latest comment: 5 years ago by Nicoleccc in topic Nicole article draft feedback

Megan's peer review

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Hi!

I enjoyed the brief information you have on Dracula Park so far. Truthfully, I didn't even know Dracula Park existed, so fascinating to know so! I think other readers will enjoy it as well since it isn't something that is brought up often. Within your editing of the article, I think it would be a great addition to add some pictures. When I read it, I wonder if it is a park full of Dracula statues, or if it is strictly a park with sings explaining the fiction character. I like the history you gave with the topic; especially, why Romania culture does not like it but that it is benefiting the country in some monetary way. I look forward to seeing the finalized article!MTR34 (talk) 18:37, 17 February 2019 (UTC)Reply

Nicole article draft feedback

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Hi, Lou!

You've drafted some good additions here--the work on organization alone is a big help for the article. Sections and a table of contents are useful! As you continue working on this, some things to consider might include:

  • Since this material will likely be integrated with the article's existing material, what would a lead section be? Are those first two sentences of the existing article still an accurate and complete lead into the article once your additions are included?
  • references should be linked after each statement of fact (for example, the claim of government leaders preferring other attractions to be the core of their tourism image is stated as fact, so will need a source. You will want to look carefully through your additions to make sure all statements of fact are supported directly with sources)
  • what else do you still plan to add? Have you been able to find information about economic impact? Other specific locations that draw this particular type of tourism? Any other information about the moratorium until 2026 on other Dracula-centered tourist developments? Were there any documents clarifying why it took six years for the Dracula Park proposal to be approved? (you may not find information to answer all of these questions--they're just some I still have after reading your draft)

I hope these notes are helpful, and I look forward to reading the final version of this! Nicoleccc (talk) 19:58, 18 February 2019 (UTC)Reply