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Latest comment: 7 years ago by Josefhoracek in topic The Lead for Robert Ball

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Parker, Danny S. Battle of the Bulge: Hitler's Ardennes Offensive, 1944-1945. Philadelphia: Combined, 1991. Print.

Your sources look good. Josef Horáček (talk) 17:17, 27 October 2015 (UTC)Reply
You added the sources wrong. You were supposed to add citations to specific places in the text. Read this for help: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Help:Referencing_for_beginners. Josef Horáček (talk) 21:03, 3 November 2015 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for fixing the problem. The article is a lot better thanks to your contribution. Josef Horáček (talk) 16:34, 13 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

The Lead

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Next time, please put comments about your work here in the talk page. Your lead is very good and doesn't need any changes. Josef Horáček (talk) 22:02, 1 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

Copyedit an Article

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The comma you added in your second edit doesn't really fix the sentence. The sentence is grammatically incoherent and needs to be rewritten. If you want to redo it, I'll give you a week to make the revision. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:29, 12 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

Revised Sentence --Klpoi5 (talk) 15:20, 22 February 2017 (UTC)Reply
It still wasn't quite right. I went ahead and made some changes. Let's leave it at that. Josef Horáček (talk) 13:39, 26 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

Adding Sources

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Your sources look great. Go ahead and add them to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:31, 12 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

You did a good job formatting the citations, but you may want to revise some of the wording in your text. Monuments are "erected" not "administered." Also, "along with this monument, a speech was given..." sounds awkward. Instead say, "At the unveiling of this monument, a speech was give..." Make these changes by Mar. 3. Josef Horáček (talk) 13:22, 26 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

The Lead for Robert Ball

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Your lead will definitely improve the article. Leave out the sentence about Otto Müller - it's too much detail. Post the lead. Josef Horáček (talk) 04:01, 22 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

Good job. You're done with this one. Josef Horáček (talk) 13:42, 26 February 2017 (UTC)Reply