User talk:Kiralopez13/sandbox

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Kiralopez13 in topic Ariyon Taylor Peer Review

Ariyon Taylor Peer Review

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GREAT job on how well you edited your current article, your sandbox is very self explanatory. I look forward to seeing the edits you continue to make for each of the sections. You have created a clear structure in your edits. Based on looking at the edits you have made thus far; I look forward to seeing more discussion on the "The Sun, The Line, and The Cave" this section applies so much to your main topic and it can be discussed in greater details.

However I think you definitely need to make sure the audience is clear on understanding what the allegory of the cave is within itself. My question to you would be are there any other philosophers that discuss this topic? If so do you think it would be necessary to add their discussions in? Having others discussion would be useful in fully understanding the significance of this allegory.

Kira Lopez Response: Thank you for your consideration during your review. There are further sections in the actual article that speak on the scholarly discussion that I will definitely look at as I continue my editing. I find it crucial to analyze the most important parts of this article to allow a full understanding for the mainstream public. I believe that adding more detail on different aspects of the cave will be an important part of creating a more unified piece. I also have a lot planned for the sun the line and the cave as long as I can format it in a correct way that remains neutral and contains no paraphrasing.--Kiralopez13 (talk) 21:28, 05 March 2019 (UTC)Reply