User talk:Kilroy.15/sandbox
Latest comment: 9 years ago by 164.107.47.208 in topic Illustrated
Instructor Comments
editWell-written
edit- History section needs expansion and work.
- Watch for Neutrality.
Verifiable with no original research
edit- Would like to see a little more diversity of sources if possible.
Broad in its coverage
edit- Good here.
Neutral
edit- Watch out for non-neutral words.
Stable
edit- No comments yet.
Illustrated
edit- Good - but get place an Infobox in.
164.107.47.208 (talk) 17:09, 9 December 2014 (UTC)
Great Start, but I see some issues:
- The City of Forest Park is in Cincinnati, NOT Columbus. Be careful about this - Most of your article is about the one in Cincinnati.
- Neutrality: This is the biggest issue so far. I'm sure this is a great place to live, but it sounds like your selling it. Don't do that. For example: Forest Park is an excellent example of a planned community INSTEAD it should read: Forest Park is a planned community located in Columbus, Ohio.
- There is already A LOT on Forest Park (HINT: It already has a Wikipedia Page)
- Lead Section: Check out the Lead Section guidelines to help you with this.
- Use Double-Brackets to link to outside articles (like I did above).
- Is 1961 after WWII? The traditional Baby-Boom suburbs where in the 1950's.
- Education: Name the schools; Enrollments; Location (all of this is Public Information).
- On Civic Assn: Be careful about Neutrality.
- Move Geography Up in the Sandbox
Kenitzer.1 (talk) 16:02, 18 November 2014 (UTC)
2nd draft
editNotes from the class editor: I would possibly add a section on demographics who lives there, median age, etc., also keep in mind Zach's comments above about neutrality. Overall, a good base. Kowalski.118 (talk) 12:57, 9 December 2014 (UTC)