User talk:Jez.chow/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Richard.arnold32

This article has a good neutral writing style; the text is clear and well-written. The "Eradication of diseases" section could use additional references; there are currently none. Also in that section, I would avoid the use of the first person. Many statements throughout the article are presented without reference as well. I think the most important thing that could be changed would be expanding many of the single sentence paragraphs and statements into a more cohesive story. Richard.arnold32 (talk) 01:25, 10 April 2017 (UTC)Reply