User talk:Jenny1004jeon/sandbox

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Yp1998 in topic Peer Review 1

Peer Review 1

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Section: Microcredit

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  • Your content is neutral and touches on both sides of the argument.
  • Perhaps the first line would read better as "Microcredit is small loans without collateral given to people in poverty." — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yp1998 (talkcontribs) 05:17, 17 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • One thing I noticed was that you mention that the Grameen bank is women centric, perhaps you could expand on how the Grameen bank caters to women. What specific resources do they provide/ what systems do they have in place that support the participation of women in their microcredit programs?
  • I really liked that you mentioned how in some cases, microcredit leads to women falling back into the poverty trap. Maybe you could expand a little more on the specific reasons and mechanisms that lead to such cases.

Section: Ongoing Projects

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  • I'm surprised that the SDGs weren't already a part of the original article, so I think it's really great that you've included them into the discussion.
  • It would be even better if you could include more information about the exact efforts that have been taken under the applicable SDGs.

Section: U.S Involvement

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  • I felt that this section could potentially be divided into two parts: one concerned with global efforts taken by the U.S and the other with more domestic ones.

Overall, I think the topics you've chosen are so great and so important as well. Your content is great and I think it will be interesting to see which particular areas you will delve into further.

--Yp1998 (talk) 05:15, 17 March 2018 (UTC)Yalini PrabhakaranReply