User talk:Jcho53/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Rachelleliu in topic general suggestions

Hi, Your groups draft looks pretty balanced in terms of themes and visually. The tone is neutral and more professional than the original page so good job. You could add a section about any publications of WBK and maybe expand a bit more about his family and his life pre-JHU such as his early life, (does he have kids/siblings?), is there anything that explains why he wanted to go into medicine? Just some of those background stuff. You could expand a little and talk about how the CPR was an accidental discovery from the link below. Here's an additional link: http://eknygos.lsmuni.lt/springer/571/1-9.pdf Nice job! Rh1324 (talk) 19:38, 16 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

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Would be useful to include both a section on early life to differentiate the different parts of the biography in terms of personal life and education and career. May also be useful to add a section for awards or honors if there are multiple. It may also be helpful to list information chronologically in the biography and then add sections later on to go into detail about certain topics. If a picture of William Kouwenhoven is available that may be good to add but other related photos would also add to the article.Rachelleliu (talk) 22:36, 26 March 2017 (UTC)Reply