User talk:Irinal360/sandbox
Saran's Peer Review edit
The Lead: So far, your to-do list for your lead looks pretty good. I would also be sure to include some information about the people that speak Wangkajunga. Otherwise, I really like the colorful table you included.
Phonology: (Vowels + Consonants): These two sections were very clear, succinct and gave me a pretty good overview of those aspects of the language. The only thing I may add probably links to the sounds in your chart.
Syllable structure: This section was clear and easy to follow for the most part, but I did find the wording a bit confusing, and I wonder if it would show exactly where there are exceptions to the common syllable structure; saying “shown below” is a bit vague and confusing. I was also curious to know whether or not the table was organized in any particular order?
Stress: This section can definitely be fleshed out more by explaining what other languages are in the same region as Wangkajunga and maybe linking to their Wikipedia pages to give readers more context.
Morphology: This section was really great, and your use of the table really formatted the data in a way that was easy to follow and understand. Additionally, I think it would be helpful to explain why some things are bolded in the table (if this was accidental/has no meaning, disregard the comment). I also really liked that you included the formulas for morphological processes like nominalization and verb construction. As for the sections on affixation, they were very information heavy, and I think it would help to link more complex concepts to order pages to help maintain clarity. I additionally, to help make this section more easy to follow, it might be useful to include some examples from your grammar, similar to what you did for reduplication but on a smaller scale. Other than that, the rest of this section gave me a very broad and succinct understanding of the language.
Syntax: This section was very easy to understand and flowed well. I like how you included some examples of the possible word languages in Wangkajunga, although I do wonder if there is a better way to present the data in a way that is consistent and more aesthetically pleasing. The section on Case and agreement is very dense, nonetheless, it was easy to follow and things were clear. My only add would be to link to another Wikipedia page that explains what Ergative Absolutive is (so that you don’t have to get into all the nuances of it), as well as including examples of how this system works in Wangkajunga.
Overall, great work on your first draft! You did a really remarkable job in making sure that the information was easy flowing, and provided a broad overview of the attributes of Wangkajunga. Through the inclusion of more explanations and incorporating other Wikipedia pages in your article, I think you can tremendously improve your page.
Joyce's Peer Review edit
First Read: Your wiki page has all the section it needs! The to-do list on the list has enough information, but I would add a few relevant interesting facts about your language (the few interesting facts we had to research for Practicum 1). The contextual paragraphs are written clearly. I like how you converted the dense information in your grammar to a simple and easy to understand read for the reader. Overall, your page looks great!
Lead: As I said above, a few relevant interesting facts about your language from practicum 1 should make your lead more interesting!
Phonology: The tables and short paragraphs are easily understood by the reader. In the syllable structure subsection, I think you should explain more with CV(V)(C). I was a little bit confused. Does it mean that it could be CVC? or CVVC? or CVC? Are all three of the structures possibilities? Clarifying this within the paragraph would be helpful to the reader(don't want readers to infer whats going on).
Morphology: I liked how you used formulas to represent the general structure of morphological processes. One small inconvenience I had with the table in the subsection of derivational suffixes is the example column of the table. Is it possible to put a table within the table to properly align the morphemes? Or a simpler way is to do the 3 line glossing. In the following subsections, I realised you don't have examples supporting your morphological processes(Verbs, Derivational, and Inflectional). Adding simple examples here would help! Overall, the section looks great!
Syntax: The introduction paragraph for the syntax section can be well understood. However, the placement of the letters SVO were not aligned exactly with the morphemes so it caused a small confusion. Formatting the whole 3-line with a table can be helpful to distinguish which letter of SVO goes with which morpheme. The Headedness sections looks good!
Overall: This is a great first draft! There are no gaps. Correction of small errors should make this page even better. One small technical issue: adding some links directly to you wiki page would help the reader understand some complex terminology!