User talk:Ifonder/The Tomb of the Vulture Lord

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Hoopes

I think that a more appropriate way to formulate the title of this article would be "Tomb of the Vulture Lord, Takalik Abaj (Maya site)" in order to make the location more clear.

The section on "Background" contains too much unnecessary narrative and is in general too wordy. Please see the entry for Takalik Abaj to see how much decriptive information has been provided for this site already. I have added links to clarify the chronology, which should be as clear as possible for a general readership. I think a better organization for the entry would be to have a section that describes the tomb in general and another that describes its contents. In general, your entry is lacking in an adequate number of hyperlinks to other entries in Wikipedia. (Note that this is a significant feature of the resource.) I have made a few edits and adjustments, but this draft will need reworking before it is ready for Wikipedia mainspace. Please note that chronology is especially important in this entry. Hoopes (talk) 21:52, 11 March 2014 (UTC)Reply