User talk:HappyWriter99/Bertha Lutz

Hi. This is Professor Siegel. I am just testing out writing on your Talk page. You can ignore this message! MLSiegel (talk) 19:22, 3 December 2021 (UTC)

Hello, this is Remy McCuistion, doing a peer review. I really like how the sections are recorded to better flow together. The sentence added about how she started hearing about suffrage in Europe, could be reworded or add another one to make it flow better with the rest of the paragraph. I really like the added paragraph about her work in Brazil. I found it really brought together our work from class into the existing page. The red words don't seem to have an existing Wiki page so maybe remove the links. I think the added information in the paragraph is written well but I would suggest reading it aloud multiple times just to make sure it is clear and that citations are all in place. Overall this is well done and shows an understanding of her place in history. Underwaterbubble (talk) 21:02, 9 December 2021 (UTC)

Hi, this is Melissa Torres. You guys did a really good job in editing this article. Compare to before the original article didn't really mention her participation in the 1919 peace conference besides brief mentions, so it is really great you guys expanded on that. Apart from removing the Red Links from the page, and doing some proofreading among ourselves to ensure that the article is flowing nicely. You guys really went far and beyond in her background and highlight her role in not just her career but for the women's rights movement.Mtorres-carranco (talk) 21:36, 9 December 2021 (UTC)