User talk:Haassr/sandbox

Your subheadings are a good addition to the original Wiki. As you said, the original page has a lot of information but very little structure. I would look into what additional sources you can find to supplement what is already on the existing Wiki. The current page has a lot of info so make sure you can add all that you can.Bankstonad (talk) 21:46, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

The information you have so far is useful, but a fuller more descriptive account would make this a better article. IndigoSpranger (talk) 03:24, 24 October 2017 (UTC)

Just making the sections longer and expand on the topic/events will improve the page a lot. Adding a source or two more would also make the article more notable. The introduction could use some work, make sure when you put this on the real wiki page to take out the words "I will be working on..."Jennifer.cerer (talk) 20:59, 24 October 2017 (UTC)