User talk:Evelynvpratt/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Njclum in topic Comments on Rough Draft

Comments on Bibliography

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Evelyn: Good start, but there are additional citations that might be useful. Check out Sikes 1998, McClure and Randolph 1980, Pearson 1952, and Mengak 2002. I think your "Mammals of the Eastern U.S." citation is already in the list (Serena).Njclum (talk) 15:29, 16 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

Sandbox Review

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Evelyn: The citations look great, don't forget to number them. I see some have and some haven't. The very first sentence is opinion based, it is better to stick to hard facts. In the sentence "Then finally at 70 days old they finally leave their nest", I would remove one of the "finally's". The second to last sentence "they're" needs to be fixed. Other than those minor edits great job! Good sources. (Hannahmorong (talk) 04:11, 28 November 2016 (UTC))Reply

Comments on Rough Draft

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Evelyn: Good work on piecing this information together. Nice logical progression. As Hannah mentions, don't forget to use the proper format for your citations. The section on longevity is a little confusing because you say that in the wild they live for three years and then on the other hand you say they live for one year. Maybe you mean to say "up to" in the first sentence and "typically" in the second. Any info on age at first breeding?Njclum (talk) 17:17, 4 December 2016 (UTC)Reply