User talk:Equint3/sandbox

Homework for Monday, February 9

Selected article for copyediting: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Urban_Decay_(cosmetics)
I would improve this article by correcting words that may or may not need to be capitalized, as well as, adding or removing necessary punctuation.

Homework for Thursday, February 12

I first selected this article for getting better/additional sources and citations: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sailor
Instead of article listed above, I got additional sources and citations for this article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Painting

Good choices. I approve both articles. Josef Horáček (talk) 03:40, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

1. PERRY, LINCOLN. "The Music Of Painting." American Scholar 83.3 (2014): 85-93. Literary Reference Center. Web. 11 Feb. 2015.
2. Jones, Howard. "The Varieties Of Aesthetic Experience." Journal For Spiritual & Consciousness Studies 37.4 (2014): 541-252. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 Feb. 2015.
3. Key, Joan. "Future Use: Abstract Painting." Third Text 23.5 (2009): 557-563. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 Feb. 2015.
4. Droste, Flip G. "Cave Paintings Of The Early Stone Age: The Early Writings Of Modern Man." Semiotica 2014.202 (2014): 155-165. Communication & Mass Media Complete. Web. 11 Feb. 2015.
Equint3 (talk) 10:57, 12 February 2015 (UTC)

WP discourages new editors to work on articles that are on a very general topic. But I see that you found some good sources, and the article does need citations. So go ahead. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:44, 17 February 2015 (UTC)

Homework for Monday, February 23

Selected article for adding a lead: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sign_language_in_the_brain
I believe the information in the article I chose is in the correct order. Although there is much information given to explain sign language in the brain, I would ask other editors to find/add more information about treatment for deaf aphasics. That information is short and sweet, but in my opinion, I think it can be expounded upon given more information.
Equint3 (talk) 01:56, 23 February 2015 (UTC)

Homework for Thursday, February 26

Here is my lead for the article I chose: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sign_language_in_the_brain
Sign language, as opposed to vocally speaking, refers to the way people communicate using physical communication and body language. Damage in the left hemisphere of the brain, either the Broca’s area or Wernicke's area, affects the brain generally causing people to utilize sign language with the intention of having the ability to communicate with others.
Equint3 (talk) 19:12, 26 February 2015 (UTC)

The article may be a good choice, but your lead is off the mark. You're defining sign language rather than discussing how and where sign language is produced in the brain. Remember, there already is an article on sign language (and you should add an internal link to it in your lead). This article is specifically about the research pertaining to sign language and the brain. Josef Horáček (talk) 03:20, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Also, this article is an orphan, which means that no one is likely to lead your contribution. You should think about adding internal links to this article on other articles, such the main article on sign language or related articles on speech and the brain. Those links will drive traffic to this article. Josef Horáček (talk) 03:20, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Sign language, as opposed to vocally speaking, refers to the way people communicate using physical visual-spacing communication and body language. It has been determined that the brain's left side is the dominant side utilized for producing and understanding sign language, just as it is for speech. Signers with damage in the the Wernicke's area (left hemisphere) of the brain have comprehension problems, while those with damage in the Broca's area (also left hemisphere) have production problems with signing.
Equint3 (talk) 01:53, 4 March 2015 (UTC)

Equint3 I emailed all information and edits to you. Hmchapman (talk) 14:48, 27 October 2015 (UTC)

Equint3 - Peer Review

History Section: • For each name mentioned in the timeline, I would provide an external link directly in the sentence. • If you are going to use the word “trans” either explain its meaning before using it or just switch it with “transgender” o This way your piece is clearer, because some of you audience may not be familiar with the specific word “trans” • Each bullet should be cited directly • Make sure to cite the events/organizations also. It would be best to link the events direct to another website/link o FTM International, International Transgender Day of Remembrance, Sylvia Riveria Law Project, The Equal Employment Opportunity Commission, Title VII, National Center for Transgender Equality, etc.

“Transgender Awareness Week events” • Capitalize “events”^^ • “One possible event is the screening of a trans-themed movie, such as the film "Paris is Burning" which highlights gay and transgender ball culture in New York City.” o One possible event is “frilly” just state the event • In the last sentence change “revolves” to “revolve”

“Additional information with controversies” • Capitalize title^^ • This section could be viewed as biased • Careful using words like “even”, “simply”, “just” o Trans people have been previously murdered simply for being trans, in addition to their loved ones and/or friends just for being involved with them. Some trans women were even arrested for fighting back against their attacker. Twils637 (talk) 14:50, 27 October 2015 (UTC)