User talk:Emanel2/sandbox

Evaluations

11/14/2018 Evaluation by kkatiekrue

Points:37/40 Grade:92.5%

Spelling/Grammar - Nearly Meets Standard - I was a little lost in the third sentence of the second paragraph.

Language - Exceeds Standard - Very neutral tone

Organization - Exceeds Standard - Lots of info, but still easy to read

Coding - Exceeds Standard - Should Dialects in the header be capitalized?

Validity - Exceeds Standard

Completion - Meets Standard

Relevance - Exceeds Standard - Great topic

Sources - Exceeds Standard - The sources look good.

Citations - Exceeds Standard

References - Nearly Meets Standard - The links for your book citations #3 and #9 might need help, they only go to a generic Wiki page on ISBN numbers. #10 also might not link to what you intended. Kkatiekrue (talk) 04:01, 15 November 2018 (UTC)kkatiekrue

11/15/2018 Evaluation by Jenjen731

• Points: 43.5/40
• Grade: 108%

Spelling/Grammar

Exceeds Standard Great, but maybe switching the word "of" to "in" in the second to last sentence in the first paragraph. "...bilingual education of the region of Madrid." to "...bilingual education in the region of Madrid."

Language

Exceeds Standard Neutral and easy to understand.

Organization

Meets Standard

Coding

Exceeds Standard

Validity

Exceeds Standard

Completion

Meets Standard

Relevance

Exceeds Standard Great topic, I learned a bit while reading it.

Sources

Exceeds Standard

Citations

Exceeds Standard

References

Meets Standard

11/15/2018 Evaluation by Benjamin Pocheron

• Points: 43/40
• Grade: 107.5%

Spelling/Grammar

Exceeds Standard

Language

Exceeds Standard Neutral, great!

Organization

Meets Standard

Coding

Meets Standard Maybe link some words in your text to other Wikipedia's pages?

Validity

Meets Standard It would be even better if you can bring more precision to the following "which was from about 1492 to around 1659". "bilingual education", for what languages? "so it is considered to be a linguistic isolate", who considers that? Does everybody agree?

Completion

Exceeds Standard

Relevance

Meets Standard

Sources

Exceeds Standard

Citations

Exceeds Standard

References

Exceeds Standard

12/4/2018 Evaluation by HelpMeKnow08

• Points: 42.5/40
• Grade: 106.25%

Spelling/Grammar

Nearly Meets Standard - I was a little lost in the third sentence of the second paragraph.

Language

Meets Standard - Suggested edits: First paragraph first sentence, maybe use "end their" instead of "conclude an," fourth sentence "In 2013" and "anticipating" instead of "waiting," fifth sentence, "declined" instead of "have rejected," sixth sentence "came out with the request" could be written more clearly, eighth sentence "was made" instead of "was being made," last sentence in first paragraph change "which" to "who." Second paragraph first sentence state the exact date "November 29, 2013," and possibly delete the sentence in the first paragraph that also refers to signing the treaty; it seems more useful in the second paragraph. Second paragraph second sentence can have more description; it kind of sounds like a sleepover (were they peacefully protesting through the night?), fourth sentence "forceful" instead of "forcing," sixth sentence could be updated to "On the second day of protesting nearly 800,000 people gathered from all corners of Ukraine to Khreshchatyk - the main street of Kiev." When describing the conflicts by the President's building, this isn't clear. Did the protests move there from where they started? The sentence about putting up tents could be added to the other reference about the 800,000 people gathering. I'd delete the sentence "It was a very cruel Administration." This sounds like an opinion and also like the opening sentence to a whole new paragraph. Third paragraph change "grouping" to "group," delete "shamefully" since it sounds like an opinion and I think we need to more simply state the facts. Change "beaten up to death" to "beaten to death", "government's special forces," "Thus, more people began coming from the entire city of Kiev to Maidan." In the fourth paragraph, last sentence you name two people who died. Were they prominent people, or you can just call them citizens or protestors or some other term to help describe who they are.

Organization

Meets Standard - A good intro paragraph or brief overview sentence to describe the heading "Kiev Euromaidan" would be great. I had to Google the term because I didn't know what it was and it still wasn't explained in the first paragraph.

Coding

Exceeds Standard

Validity

Exceeds Standard

Completion

Exceeds Standard

Relevance

Exceeds Standard - Yes! Very good!

Sources

Exceeds Standard

Citations

Exceeds Standard - It seems like the first two sentences in your first paragraph were shortened so that you could add the citations at the end of the sentences. You can combine the sentences together if you want them to to have a more natural flow and then just add both citations at the end of the sentence.

References

Meets Standard

12/5/2018 Evaluation by Benjamin Pocheron

• Points: 40.5/40
• Grade: 101.25%

Spelling/Grammar

Meets Standard (4)

1. Great job.

Language

Meets Standard (4)

1. Very neutral. Sometimes too much? I feel like I sometimes read facts, facts, just for reading facts.

Organization

Meets Standard (4)

1. Can be better for the eyes if you add sub-headers for your different paragraphs.

2. Good chronology of events.

Coding

Meets Standard (4)

1. You could link some works or nouns to existing Wikipedia pages.

Validity

Meets Standard (4)

Completion

Exceeds Standard (4.5)

Relevance

Meets Standard (4)

1. You begin with "Ukraine decided to conclude an association with the European Union." What is the context? Why did they decide that?

2. "There had already been an appointed date for the approval of the association." What association...?

3. What does this treaty do?

Sources

Meets Standard (4)

Citations

Meets Standard (4)

References

Meets Standard (4)